ext_3993 ([identity profile] elainasaunt.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] gyzym 2010-09-19 01:31 pm (UTC)

OMG, this is perfect. The backstory is entirely believable, especially about Mal and Arthur's fondness for her. I just saw the film for the second time (and loved it every bit as much), and you've got the voices exactly right. A few favorite lines:

a neat little frown he has spent ages perfecting

"Well," he says instead, raising his eyebrow, "this is predictable."

a smirk so over-the-top that it gives Arthur a headache


and finally, most wonderfully,

Are we minding the gap?

Spotted a few typos. I'll PM them to you if you want.

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